Running Comp 05

So. Here is my most up to date running comp. There are some issues with it, and there is still some rendering to be done. I think it looks good for the most part but I just hope I can finish the damn rendering.

Update... with only a few days left

With animation basically done I'm heading into my house mates Uni today to get a heap of rendering done (hopefully) so that I don't have to worry about it. I know I can easily get the diffuse and ambient occlusion passes done but I'm still a little unsure on how to properly do the beauty pass with only the hair, and if I have enough time, the ambient occlusion pass too.
I have one photo to go, they have been a royal pain in the ass but I've found faster ways of doing them so with each new one it's taking less time.
I guess that's it for now. I'll post how my rendering goes today with a running comp update (hopefully).

RunningComp04

So today I went back to the little things that were annoying me and fixed them up, did another shot, and readied another for animating. Since things here and there have changed throughout doing each shot, like the attributes on the dynamics, I also went back and fixed the master scene in the hopes to avoid anything screwing up when I move onto the other shots. I have also decided to not do a master camera in one scene and instead break them up into shot by shot scenes. I had to do this because having to cache the hair and the cloth takes a while per test, if something doesn't work I have to go back and fix it, so it figured it was better to cache 100 frames at a time for each scene rather than try and cache 1000.
Also, I have decided to ditch one shot and replace it with another. I think it'll not only help things flow a little better but also make things a little easier on me. I'm going to remove the hug between the two characters and replace it with the Old Man sitting on the end of the bed.

Running Comp 03

Getting there slowly now. Here's where I'm basically up to. There are some small things I went and fixed, like there are actually photos in the photo album, but it's damn near 4am and I can't be bothered going back and re-playblasting. Hopefully I'll have another update on here soon.
Some little things that have bogged me down though are the dynamics. While I am getting better at controlling them it's time I don't have so my days are getting longer and my nights shorter.

Also, I plan on beginning rendering while I sleep starting tomorrow night so hopefully I can keep on top of that rather than trying to do it last minute but hey, things are already pretty last minute hey.

Running Comp 02

Another early morning and so here's a little update. I've been working on the fourth shot at the moment. There have been a few issues but all manageable. The photo album I did needed to be scaled down to fit but because I did blend shapes, rather than trying to control it with joints it squashed it, so when the album was opened the cover and pages on one side shortened and looked stupid. So I fixed that. More importantly though, the Little Girls character set isn't working properly any more which is a pain in the ass but I'm working around that for the time being and keying everything manually. Not exactly fun but I'm hoping that when I start the next shot I can re-import the Little Girl and hopefully it'll fix that issue.

Running Comp... I guess

While it still needs some tweaking and it's not actually rendered, obviously, here's my opening.

Oh and the teddy bear is missing but... let's not worry about that.

Old Man Rigging

Today has been... interesting to say the least with trying to rig the Old Man. Too many times I thought that I had everything ready to go to just rig and move on but I don't know when it happened but the rig was (trying not to swear here) buggered. The join orientation was all wrong for the legs and feet, I didn't realise this until I had skinned him (ok so there were some minor hints, like the foot controller was a different shape to what it should have looked like, but anyway...) so I had to go in and manually re-orient the joints basing it off the Little Girls rig which was a pain but I eventually got it done.
I'm currently weight painting the at the moment, all is currently going well (knock on wood), but I stopped for a moment to post this. I found an AMAZING script/tool for helping with weight painting. It worked perfectly with the Little Girl and at the moment it's working for the Old Man. Basically I can simply mirror the weight paints across (sure Maya has some stuff in built but this just works).
It came in handy with the Little Girl as some of the weight paints I did just seemed impossible/ridiculously tedious to try and replicate to the other side. I contemplated doing it all in Photoshop but I had already spent SO MUCH DAMN TIME playing in Photoshop with exporting and importing, and custom painting weight maps that I could no longer think properly. I decided to look around on the internet and yeah, here we are, happy that things are progressing at the much nicer pace.

Anyway, with all that said, I feel like I am so damn close to having everything in a scene soon, like Sunday even. I doubt it will take longer but hey, if I'm not there by then I'm going to email Jack like crazy with advice... or just cry.

Little Girl Rig

So. From what it seems the rig for the Little Girl is done. The hair works and so does the cloth, oh and the blend shapes (thanks again Jack). Sure it takes a little while to render but it looks so pretty. I could tweak the cloth a little but I've spent so damn long on this damn thing (holy balls did weight painting take a while but I think I have it down to a fine art now haha) that I'm sick of looking at it. The Old Man shouldn't take all that long to put together as I knew this was going to take ages, and I've learnt a lot doing this so yeah, he should be up a running in no time.

P.S. Yes the hair is just curves but it shows how they're dynamic and move when her head moves, the paint effects don't show in play blasts.

Update: Blend Shapes

Finally got my blend shapes working for the Little Girl. While they aren't fully implemented, no eyes and no eyebrows, I think it looks quite cool. Thanks to Jack for helping my tired self to remember just how to do this.

I should be posting here again soon with more little updates as things are just about ready (finally) to start animating.

Another Freaking Update

The Little Girl now has the skeleton and influences in, the hair parented into where it'll move with everything else, all that needs to be done to this is the auto rigger. I know it's not where I should be but it's ready to go.
Also, little side note, this one is for nCloth. I only want to use it for one scene, I've read about how to implement it easily enough BUT I do have another option. I've put a separate rig aside that won't have nCloth, it's just the mesh.
By Tuesdays class I won't have the rigs finished, they will be ready to go though, I just want Jack to check over everything first, mainly the influences cos I'm not feeling too great about the placement at the moment.

Updates Updates Updates.

So, here we are, coming into week 11. I am behind where I'd like to be but I am trying to get up to speed.
I've got some blend shapes together for the Little Girl, and her hair is basically done. Her rig is basically ready to go too, same with the Old Man.
As for the bedroom it's almost all coloured/textured which is nice.
Before the next production class I'd like to have my scenes all broken up and ready to go. I have all the cameras in one scene at the moment locked down. It would be really handy to have all the scenes referencing the models because I need to start animating but things haven't been finished so that would make it so much easier to go back and finish things up later on and not have to import things into 10 different scenes.
I'd also like to have my characters done. I'm so close to that but I keep getting distracted by the little things that it's just not getting done.

Anyway. Better get back to it.

Update Week 9

I figured while I was here I'd just update ya'll with where I'm at.

The Old Man has some basic colour on him, the rig is almost ready (just needs some influences), the mesh is basically where I want it (just need to zBrush the UV layouts).

The Little Girl is in the same spot as the Old Man, basically ready to go.

The environment (room) has some colours on it, nothing special, but I does need more things in it to make it more of a room, something I'll either do when I get sick of animating and need a break or after the animating is done. Same goes for what I'd like to do in Mudbox, and proper texturing the characters and room.

Jack was nice enough to help me on Tuesday with some little things I was having problems with (I didn't know what I was doing basically). The hair system now moves with the skeleton for the Little Girl so when I skin everything she should have some nice dynamic hair. The (well I think it is) fancy looking rug I made has been implemented nicely. All in all the little issues I did have have been fixed, anything new that pops up (we all know they will) I'll make sure to put on here or at least keep note of for when we return from "holidays".

Untill next time. To infinity and beyond!

Showreel

I'd say that the title speaks for itself.

Little Girl Hair Update

Put this together today, well not all of today, and I think it's promising. From what I understand I should be able to get the hair to brush behind her ear fairly simply.
If this all fails then I have backup ideas but I'd like to have actual hair.

Also, just chucked some colour on, didn't even manage to get the hair colours right... dang it again.

Old Man update

Aside from the shoes, still trying to find a free model to use, the model is finished. I slapped some colour on him real quick cos I could. I'm fairly happy with him but I need to move on and catch up to where I need to be, animating. Hopefully by Tuesday I'll be at a point where Jack won't be wanting to throttle me anymore.
The little girl model is all but done too, just gotta stick on her new ears. Again it's not perfect but yeah, gotta get moving with more important things.

...just realised he still doesn't have buttons, or a fly it seems. Dang it.

Updates and the like.

I'm about done with the Old Man, not in that I've almost finished (I kinda have really) more that I'm over modeling him. All I'm missing is his shoes, and some small detail on his top like buttons, and I need to stitch the ear I made onto him, then I think that's it really.

Also, not too sure but I have a pretty strong feeling, that he may have too many polygons on his head.

Double also, I would like to take him into Mudbox or something and get some detail on his head and clothing but I guess that needs to wait really as it's something that can wait and if I have time do it then.

Today I researched nCloth and hair in Maya, I think I found some good and somewhat simple tutorials. Both aren't huge on the list of things to do, and yeah, I now have a list which I'm keeping track of every day, but they are things that I would like to add if I get the chance.
I only did this because I thought I lost some work and tried to do something else before I went home, luckily I had a backup at home.

Some other things that came up today were the photos in the photo album and how I'm going to go about doing those. Originally I was going to do them in 3D but I'm thinking now that I could photoshop, or something similar, the pictures and use something like the After Effects puppet tool to do a small amount of animation like what was in the animatic.

Darren also talked to me about my titles, I realise they are still a ways away seeing as how I haven't begun animating but it was something to think about. Some good ideas were thrown around by Darren and Josie which was helpful.

Just another update

Retypologysing the Old Mans head has been... fun. Clearly he is missing a lot of form but I needed to get all the loops in order and flowing correctly before continuing. It's still not quite right but it's close.

Also today, I decided to take a bit of a break from doing my characters and look at the rooms assets again. This time I looked at the rug that will be on the floor under the photo album. I think it looks kinda neat at the moment. I just threw a cube in there as a place holder for the photo album so it has some clipping issues, that and the rug is currently round which isn't what it's meant to be but hey, I'm just trying to see how quickly I can put some things together to make the room look a little nicer.

Assets Update... and other shizz

The Little Girls room is getting there, slowly. I'm starting to find it hard to come up with junk to fill it with to make it look lived in.
Aside from doing this I've been working on my characters. Been having trouble with the Little Girls face and trying to get it to where I don't dislike the look of it. I've made a start on the Old Mans face but his eyes have proven to be annoying with trying to get the typology looking nice.

Maya Character Update

Just an update on how my characters are going.
After talking to Jack I've changed how the Old Mans clothes are going to be. Instead of being cloth they simply won't be, this is to save time, and it's really not necessary as his clothes won't be hanging off him.
I'll be starting to add more detail now, like the faces, I'm expecting to put this into Mudbox/Zbrush at some point soon. Bounnong offered to do that for me, not too sure if I'll take him up that offer just yet though.
While I like what I've done so far I think I'm a little behind in terms of where I want to be. I was hoping to have had the characters modelled before we got back from holidays.

My first attempt at nCloth. I haven't really changed any of the options around so it's really not perfect but I think it's a good demonstration of that can be done simply. At the moment it takes around 50 frames for the cloth to settle before animation can begin so that's something that I'll certainly have to keep in mind for later.

Here is what I have modeled so far of the Little Girl. I realised after a little while that I was going tro have to make a body underneath her clothing, even though I hadn't drawn that into my turn arounds, so that I could do cloth. I realise that this is something simple sounding but I haven't done cloth before. I wanted to have her modeled by the end of the week but that probably wont happen, mostly because of learning what I'll have to do if I want to do cloth properly, but I am still happy with how things are going, even if it's slow going.

My Final Animatic

I think this came out rather well.

Research, Style, Mood

Before I forget. Here are all the character research, style reference and mood boards. Not too shabby if you ask me.

Character Poses

Here are my poses. The characters don't move around all that much. Its more sitting to standing... so that's what I did.

Layouts

Dude. I'd say things are looking pretty sweet at the moment.
Pending Neales decision I'd like to think these will be my final layouts. I guess that's all I have to say about that.
The first image shows the initial thumbnail shots which I then made pretty and then added colour.

Just a quick little (maybe slightly large (that's what she said)) update

Here we have the characters and the Little Girls many forms. I don't think making the younger Little Girl will be all that hard in Maya as it would be essentially the same model just scaled down and all I'd need to change is the clothing and hair, yes it would take some time but I don't think it's a huge amount of work.

The Old Man has had a last minute mirrioring because when I originally visualised how he was going to look I had his telescopic eye as the left eye, the problem with this is that it wouldn't work how it needed to in the script to make the Little Girls eyes look the same, instead she would look further deformed. I also added the exit of the telescope out of the back of his head.

These are the layouts Ill be doing (pending what Neale says). I've taken what I had done in my thumbnails and prettied them up a little more now I just need to colour them.
I haven't thought all that much about colour, other than it will have most of the colour pulled out at the beginning, also with a slight sepia tone to it, and colour will slowly be added back by the end.

That's all for now. I know I've posted a lot of the same things with only minor changes but I think any progress is still progress. The rest of the stuff I'm working on isn't far away from being finished so there will hopefully be a big update soon.

Pre-Production Update.

What week is this?

I don’t even know anymore.

Let’s see...

Premise done. Treatment done. Script done.

Thumbnails done. Video block done.

...

I guess that about all I’ve finished. I don’t think it’s bad where I currently am. Possibly slightly behind but I’m certainly on the right track to getting everything done and submitted on time.

The reason I think I’m behind is because I’m wanting to do everything better this year. For me last year was a big failure and I just want everything to be of a much higher quality this year. I’m definitely putting too much effort into some areas simply because I’m enjoying it.

I really like my idea and can’t wait to see it fully realised. My story started out as something slightly bigger and this small changes here and there but with the help of my teachers I’ve been able to refine the idea into something that could be pretty (hopefully) awesome.

The major problems I’ve come across are my drawing skills. I think I doubt myself too much and I’ve been relying on Darren to help me overcome this. He has helped shape my characters to get them to where I’m really happy with them and am excited to begin putting everything into Maya.

I haven’t thought too much about next semester because I’ve been focusing so much on this semester but when I do I do get a little afraid of will I have enough time to make this animation how I want it to look. I honestly will hate myself if I create another piece of work that is anything like that I produced last year.

I’m currently working on finishing my character rotations (again because I doubt my ability to draw). I’ve done most of my storyboards but they will easily come together once I finish the character turn arounds.  Other things that I haven’t finished are the Old Man expressions (I’ll need to talk about just what I need to do there because he really doesn’t have any expressions because we barely see his face), different character poses, mood boards and my layouts.

The layouts are coming along, I think I need to talk to Neale so see if he’s happy with the ones I’ve chosen (I only want to ask because the whole animation is really just in one room).

I haven’t talked too much about how I plan on doing the animation once it’s in Maya. Jack and I talked briefly about how I should animate the Little Girls expressions. The technique I liked the most is to have all of her expressions as blend shapes which I’ll control from the shelf, although it’ll take a little while to setup all of those controls I think it’ll be worth it in the long run. The other idea Jack had was to have the Little Girls face ‘normal’ (not deformed) and use a blend shape to add the deformity, this will save a lot of time setting up the blend shapes.

Before I begin really getting stuck into Maya I will have to research how to do hair properly and how I need it to work for me. I do hope to produce something that is somewhat realistic and doing textures seems a little daunting to me as I really am unsure as to how to do them well and to a level I’ll be happy and proud of.

Since the majority of the class has had quite the bit of fun with making up quotes from my animation, mainly what the Old Man says, I think I’ll leave out any dialogue. But, after putting together the thumbnail animatic I don’t really see the need for any dialogue, while I think it could be nice to attempt doing lip-sinc I think the actions in the animations speak for themselves and voices will detract from what’s happening on screen, (if I’m wrong speak up now).

I also haven’t done extensive research into what piece of music I want to use. I have dropped in something that I like when I did the thumbnail animatic. Although it doesn’t fit perfectly I do like the piano which, when I decide on a piece, I want to keep. If I could find something that builds and becomes a fuller sound by the end, that would be awesome. I have thought about asking a friend of mine who is classically trained, can play all sorts of instruments pretty darn well, to help me with recreating a piece if it’s something that is available for free.

P.S. No, my characters don’t have names aside from Little Girl and Old Man at the moment. I don’t see the need for them to have a name just yet, though, if anyone has any ideas I’m more than willing to hear any ideas.

Texture Experimenting

I've been experimenting with the clothing choice of the characters and I think I'm getting close to a look that I'm happy with.

Character Comparisons

I quickly put this together, it's not quite finished as I'd like to add another age for the Little Girl showing her hair slowly start to cover her eye (thanks to Jack for that idea), and possibly change the clothing for the middle Little Girl.

Little Girl Expressions

While they may not look like much I think I want to go for subtle expressions more than over exaggeration through the animation. I've thought about her emotional extremes and have decided not to go too far. I don't want her to be crying because I figure when a child cries it can take a while to calm them down so it's not needed. Her smile I think is enough because while she may be happy about what her Grandfather has said to her she would still feel insecure.
The expression sheet still needs some tweaking but I think it's at a fairly good place at the moment.

Bedroom Layout 01

This is just an idea of how I'd like to set things out for the Little Girls room. Jack said that he sees it as being too cramped and too some degree I feel the same but I guess, I'll still be unsure until I take a closer look at it and start adding cameras and characters.

Little Girl Face

While it may not be perfect just yet, I think shes a little too old still (she looks around 10 but I'd like her to look around 6 years old instead). I'm hoping talking to Darren tomorrow might help with that.

Tonight I decided to vector the Old Man after looking at my drawings and becoming unsure in my final design. It didn't take too long to do so I think even now it shouldn't be too big of a deal that I've taken a step back.
I'll probably go for the one on the right over the one in the middle. I left the middle one in because that was the original design (which I liked) but I think it works better with the slight lengthening.
Also, I think I've come to a final design for the Little Girls face which I'll upload soon.

Little Girl Design

Have been experimenting with the design of the Little Girl. I think I've arrived at something that I like, it still needs some refinement though.

Old Man Body Designs

Here are the designs for the Old Mans body. I have come to a final design which now needs a little refining and then I can do is character sheet.
Again things started off simple and, with Darrens help, I have come to a final design.
While I still think its not perfect at the moment, by the time I have my model sheets done it will be something I'm proud of.
I'm currently working on the design for the Little Girl which should be up here soon.

Old Man Head Designs

My designs for the old mans head. They started off very simple and, with the help of Darren, have evolved into something I think I'm kinda proud of.

Animatic with thumbnails 02

Just thrown this together. Already looks a lot nicer. I will redraw the frames so everything looks as it should but I think this was good, it should help the film flow a lot better now.

 

Small Update

After talking to Jack today he mentioned that he didn’t really feel as though the little girls eye reveal was dramatic enough. A quick talk later and I will be rearranging a few shots to create a more dramatic and effective reveal. The shot in question is when the little girl moves the hair from her face and we see the little eye. This doesn’t really work in a dramatic way. I’m going to move it further into the animation, so instead of it being before she starts looking through the photo album it’ll now be just after the grandfather knocks on the door and she turns around. This is more effective because as the little girl looks through the photo album the viewer will question who they are looking at and why, rather than knowing and not caring as much. When I get home I will rearrange the shots, make a new animatic and upload it.

Animatic with thumbnails 01

I threw together an animatic with my thumbnails and dropped in a piece of music that I like (sorry for the poor quality), though I'm not too sure if the piece of music will remain, I will be searching around for something maybe a little more suited.

 

Thumbnails 02

After spending 4 days, 10 emails and an hour on the phone my scanner/printer finally works again. Pitty I scanned everything in today.

I talked to Jack on Thursday about my thumbnails, he said they were fine accept the ending. We talked and now I have something closer to my original idea but still fits in nicely now.
Neale liked everything.
Darren liked everything accept one frame which I will look into over the weekend.

Here's a more up to date version of my thumbnails.
(I hope to do a quick animatic with these thumbnails over the weekend also, with a temp music piece, just to see how things are flowing)

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Page 02 - These are the pictures that will go into the photo album. Note that I haven't thumbnailed every one of these just yet as I wanted to get the main thumbnails done first. The other thing that's missing is there should be more kids in the picture where the little girl is sitting on the bench, I haven't got around to it simply because I wanted to continue and couldn't be bothered drawing a bunch of kids poorly.



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Page 05 - All that is missing from this is a way to properly finish it. Darren suggested that I have one final wide shot then fade to black, I will probably go with this.

Thumbnails 1

Page one of my thumbnails so far.
(Sorry about the quality, am hoping to get a scanner very soon.)



Page two is of the photos that will be in the album.
(Some of the shots have changed angles after doing some video blocking in class today.)

Inspiration

Saw this image in a magazine and really liked the style, and the way the lighting was done in particular.



After looking the artist up on the internet I was able to find more of his work.


Source: http://www.artefato23.com.br/ and http://eduartchne.blogspot.com.au/ 

Found this and liked the way The Penguin (from Batman) looked, especially his eye piece, I think his hair and outfit would work for the Grandfather.


Source:http://www.flickr.com/photos/shoes_sheep/with/4445356873/ (Although I am doubtful that this is the original creator, it was the only place I could find with this image as I had saved it from a picture sharing site)

The montage at the beginning of ‘UP’ also inspired me. The colours, lighting and the models would be nice to try and… not copy but more… play homage to.

A Quick Rundown

What I have posted so far have been different versions of my script and shot lists.

At the moment I think I will be sticking with V2 of my script and V1 of the shot list that goes with that.

I have put up an 'easy' version of my shot list.
This was done as a back up plan. If all goes to crap and I have fallen behind then I will use this. I have changed how the Little Girls hair would move, from flowing to static, and using shadows to reveal her eye rather than moving hair. And with Neale’s advice I have changed it from the Little Girl climbing onto her Grandfathers lap to a few shots around the room and then she is just on his lap, this would save a lot of time even though I might have to create more models I think it would be easier than having to animate something complex.

Now that I think I have finalised the script and the shot list, pending any changes by teachers, I will be moving onto collating different images to try and better show the style and mood I’m after.
And in the next few days I am hoping to do my video block.

Script V2 - Shot List V1 (Simple)

CU – Toys lying on the floor.

CU – Clothes hanging in wardrobe.

MLS – LITTLE GIRL – Sitting on the floor amongst her things – Hair is creating a shadow over half her face.

MCU – Photo Album – On floor.

-          LITTLE GIRL – Places her hand on the cover and gently strokes it as though she knows what’s inside but doesn’t really want to open it.

CU – LITTLE GIRL – Moves her head – The light changes and the shadow covering her face shifts.

BCU – LITTLE GIRL – As the light shifts it is revealed that she has one considerably smaller eye.

MCU – Photo Album – She opens it. The photos are of her, which start from when she was born. Each photo moves, showing different events of her life.

CU – LITTLE GIRL - There is a knock at the door. The girl turns around. Tears in her eyes.

CU – GRANDFATHER – Sits on the edge of her bed.

CU – Pictures frame of the LITTLE GIRL and GRANDFATHER.

V/O – LITTLE GIRL – Says “Grandpa.”

CU – Stuffed toys on a shelf.

LS – Bird out the window.

CU – LITTLE GIRL sitting on GRANDFATHERS lap.

-          LITTLE GIRL – Looking down.

-          GRANDFATHER – Places his hand on her chin and begins to lift it up.

CU – LITTLE GIRL - GRANDFATHERS face – Now revealed that he has something wrong with his eye. It looks glass.

CU – LITTLE GIRL – Now looking up at her GRANDFATHER. The glass in her GRANDFATHERS eye has distorted his vision so her eyes look normal.

-          GRANDFATHER – Says ‘You have always looked beautiful to me.”

LS – LITTLE GIRL and GANDFATHER – Hugging.

Script V2 - Shot List V1

CU – Toys lying on the floor.

CU – Clothes hanging in the wardrobe

MLS – LITTLE GIRL - Sitting on the floor, amongst her things, hair over her face.

MCU – Photo album - On the floor

-          LITTLE GIRL - Places her hand on the cover and gently strokes it as though she knows what’s inside but doesn’t really want to open it.

CU – LITTLE GIRL - Begins to move her hair from her face.

BCU – LITTLE GIRL - She finishes brushing the hair from her face it is revealed that she has one considerably smaller eye.

MCU – Photo album - She opens the album. The photos are of her, which start from when she was born. Each photo moves, showing different events from her life.

CU – There is a knock at the door - The LITTLE GIRL turns around. There are tears in her eyes.

-          LITTLE GIRL – Says “Grandpa”

CU – GRANDFATHER - Sits on the edge of her bed.

-          LITTLE GIRL - Climbs onto his lap.

CU – LITTLE GIRL - GRANDFATHER begins to brush the hair from the LITTLE GIRLS face. The LITTLE GIRL is looking down, eyes closed.

CU – GRANDFATHER – Eye revealed to have something wrong with it, it’s glass.

CU – LITTLE GIRL - GRANDFATHER finishes brushing the hair from her face but now the LITTLE GIRLS eyes are the same. The glass that her GRANDFATHER has in his eye has distorted his vision, making it look like bother of the LITTLE GIRLS eyes are the same size.

CU – GRANDFATHER - Says “You have always looked beautiful to me.”

LS – They hug.

FADE TO BLACK

Script V2

INT. LITTLE GIRL'S ROOM - AFTERNOON

Close up of toys lying on the floor.

Close up of clothes hung in an open wardrobe.

LITTLE GIRL sits on the floor of her room amongst her things. Her hair covers one side of her face.

A photo album sits in front of her on the floor.

She places a hand on the cover and gently strokes it as though the knows what's inside but is unsure if she should open it.

She brushes her hair to one side as she looks at the cover which reveals her right eye, which is considerably smaller.

She opens the photo album. The photos are of her, which start from when she was born. Each photo moves which shows different events from her life.

The photos are -
   - After she is born - Held by her mother.
   - As a baby - Laying on the floor with a mobile above her.
   - First haircut - Covers her eye.
   - At the optometrist - Trying on a large pair of glasses. The weight makes her lean to one side and falls over - Grandfathers legs can be seen.
   - Getting into her mothers makeup - Draws a bigger eye over her smaller eye.
   - Asleep - Surrounded by toys.
   - Frst day of school - Standing in the doorway of her house in her school uniform.
   - School photos - All her class mates. She is standing off to one side.
   - Sitting in the back of the car - Grandfathers legs can be seen.

As the LITTLE GIRL moves through the pages there is a knock at the door. An OLD MAN walks in. The little girl turns around with tears in her eyes.

LITTLE GIRL

"Grandpa."

Her GRANDFATHER sits on the edge of the bed.

The LITTLE GIRL climbs onto his lap.

Her GRANDFATHER begins to brush the hair from her face, as he does it's shown that he also has something wrong with one of his eyes, it looks glass.

As he ceases to brush the hair from her face the LITTLE GIRLS eyes now seem to be the same size. The glass in her GRANDFATHERS eye has warped his vision and to him she looks as though nothing is wrong with her eyes.

GRANDFATHER

"You have always looked beautiful to me."

The LITTLE GIRL looks up and smiles.

They are shown in an embrace as it FADES TO BLACK.

Script V1

INT. LITTLE GIRL'S ROOM - AFTERNOON

LITTLE GIRL sits on the floor of her room.  She looks through a photo album.

She brushes her hair to one side as she looks at the cover which reveals her right eye, which is considerably smaller.

She opens the photo album. The pictures are of her, which start from when she was born. Each photo moves which shows different events from her life.

As the LITTLE GIRL moves through the pages there is a knock at the door. An OLD MAN walks in. The little girl turns around with tears in her eyes.

                                                              LITTLE GIRL

                                             Grandpa.

Her GRANDFATHER sits on the edge of the bed.

The LITTLE GIRL climbs onto his lap.

Her GRANDFATHER begins to brush the hair from her face, as he does it's shown that he also has something wrong with one of his eyes, it looks glass.

As he ceases to brush the hair from her face the LITTLE GIRLS eyes now seem to be the same size. The glass in her GRANDFATHERS eye has warped his vision and to him she looks as though nothing is wrong with her eyes.

                                                             GRANDFATHER

                                             You have always looked beautiful to me.

The LITTLE GIRL looks up and smiles.

Shot List V2 (No script)

WS – Little Girls room. Showing toys on the floor, clothes hanging in wardrobe.

MLS – Little Girl – Sitting on her bedroom floor.

CU – Little Girls face with hair covering some of her face.

BCU – Photo Album – Hand on cover.

CU – Girl brushes her hair from her face, revealing her considerably smaller eye.

CU – Photo Album – Opens the book.

-          Pictures are of the Little Girls life. From when she was born till now. The pictures show her as an outcast as she is often to one side of the picture and not part of the ‘action’.

THERE IS A KNOCK AT THE DOOR

CU – Little girl turns around to look at the door.

LS – Door – Grandfather walks in.

BCU – Little Girl – Tears in her eyes – Turns around.

-          Little Girl says - “Grandpa?”

CU – Grandfather – Sits into frame – onto bed.

WS – Both characters - Little girl climbs onto his lap. We can now see that there is something wrong with the Grandfathers eye and the Little Girls eye.

CU – Grandfathers POV – Grandfather begins to brush the hair from her face.

CU – Grandfather – Close up shot of the glass telescope in his eye. Reflection of Girl in the glass.

CU – Grandfathers POV – Little Girl – Grandfather finishes brushing the hair from her face.

-          Her eyes now look fine from his POV.

-          Grandfather says “You have always looked beautiful to me”.

CU – Little girl – Looks up and smiles.

LS – Both characters – Hugging.

FADE TO BLACK

Shot List V1 (No script)

MLS  – Little Girl – Sitting on her bedroom floor.
BCU  – Photo Album – Hand on cover.
CU    – Girl brushes her hair from her face.
CU    – Photo Album – Opens the book.
LS     – Door – Grandfather walks in.
BCU  – Little Girl – Tears in her eyes – Turns around.
CU    – Grandfather – Sits into frame – onto bed.
        – Little girl climbs onto his lap.
CU   – Grandfather begins to brush the hair from her face.
CU   – Grandfather – Shot of the glass object in his eye.
CU   – Little Girl – Grandfather finishes brushing the hair from her face.
POV – Grandfather - Looking at Little Girl - Her eyes now look fine.
        – Grandfather says “You have always looked beautiful to me”.
CU   – Little girl – Looks up and smiles.
LS    – Little Girl and Grandfather – Sitting together.
FADE TO BLACK

Shopping List V1

Shopping List

Little Girls room
• Bed
• Chest of draws
• Bookshelf
• Toys
• Clothes
• Small furniture
• Toy chest
• Bed side table
• Desk

Room
• Four walls
• Door
• Window
• Wall paper
• Carpet

Photo Album
• Ring bound (though contained within the cover)
• Glossy cover
• Girls name on cover
• Photos attached by the corners

Final Synopsis

A little girl is sitting in her room looking through a photo album. She brushes her hair to one side as she stares at the cover, revealing her right eye, her considerably smaller eye.
She opens the photo album. The pictures are of her, starting from when she was born. Each photo moves, showing the events moments before the photo was taken, and with a flash the photo finishes and the next begins to play.
As the little girl is moving through the pages there is a knock at the door. An old man walks in. The little girl turns around, tears in her eyes, and says "Grandpa".
Her Grandfather sits down in the edge of her bed. She climbs onto his lap.
Her Grandfather begins to brush the hair from her face, as he does its shown that he also has something wrong with one of his eyes, it looks like glass.
As he finishes brushing the hair from her face, the little girls eyes now seem to be the same size. The glass in her grandfathers eye has warped his vision and to him she looks as though nothing is wrong with her eyes.
The Grandfather says "You have always looked beautiful to me". The little girls looks up and smiles.

Idea Revised

After talking with my teachers I have come up with a clearer idea.
I had originally had the idea of the grandfather reading through the photo album and the viewer seeing that the little girl had a problem with her eyes. Jack mentioned that if I was to do it that way the little girl would need to look normal in the pictures because it would be the old mans point of view. I thought about that and this is what I have come up with.

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A little girl is sitting in her room looking at a photo album.
She brushes her hair from the side of her face, which shows her deformed eye; one is drastically smaller than the other eye.

She opens the photo album.
The pictures are of her, starting from when she was born.
Each photo moves – showing how she has always been an outcast due to her deformity.
Each photo ends with a flash, the next photo begins playing.

There is a knock at her door.
An old man comes in, her grandfather.
She turns around; there are tears in her eyes.

Her grandfather sits down.
She climbs onto his lap.

He begins to brush the hair from her eye.
Showing the old man we can see that he has something wrong with his eye too; there is something lodged in his head, its glass.
POV He finishes brushing the hair from her eye but she looks normal, both her eyes are the same size.
He says “You have always looked beautiful to me.”

Idea

Premise
A young girl and her grandfather, and how they are bought together due to their differences.

Synopsis
Looking through a photo album an old man looks through the life of his granddaughter. Though she has a physical deformity an accident the old man had years earlier makes him see her as though there is nothing wrong with her, she is beautiful to him.

Treatment/Basic shot list
A young man is on a boat.
There is an accident with a telescope which becomes lodged in his head.

A now old man wakes up in a rocking chair.
POV - He looks down to a photo album in his lap.
There is a girls name on the cover.
He opens it.

There are many photos of the little girl. The viewer can see she has a deformity with one of her eyes.
• Each of the photos move and are different parts of a little girls life.
o Birth
o First steps
o First day of school
o School pictures
o Trying on glasses

A car arrives at the house - seen through the window.

A little girl comes in the room with tears in her eyes and hugs the old man.

POV - He looks down at her and the looks fine. There isn’t an issue with her eyes.
He says “You’ll always look beautiful to me.”

The little girl hugs him again.